Fixing Makey-Makey Project Feb,25,2016
“ZZZZZ”! went the makey board when we clicked the button. It was an exhausting morning when my groups makey board wasn’t working for our body systems project. The lights were lighting up,but it wasn’t working.
we tried switching boards and it still wouldn’t work. We paced through the overfilled hallway to the science class to get help from a teacher but we saw that he was really busy so we tried to problem solve. we switched boards again and then when we looked at the board close up we saw that a piece of it chipped off. I got more pissed than hulk when he’s mad. I was pissed because when we got it to work it was the end of my time to share in asb unplugged.
I like your lead because I can hear the zzzz which makes it a sensory detail!
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