Tuesday, 16 February 2016

Super Strike

                      Super Strike
One day in school it was time for P.E coach made a surprised and said that we were going to learned how to strike, the coach showed the position to strike a baseball, his right leg was in front, his baseball bat was prepared to strike the ball the ball was on top of a cone and, “SPLAC” the ball went flying in the air.
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5 comments:

  1. Anonymous16 February 2016 at 00:16

    you can remove 1 of the ball and it will make more sense

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  2. Anonymous16 February 2016 at 00:20

    I like how you used onomonophetia. You said " SPLAC".

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  3. Anonymous16 February 2016 at 00:22

    Great use of sensory details I can feel like I am there.

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  4. Anonymous16 February 2016 at 00:22

    Great use of sensory details I can feel like I am there.

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  5. Anonymous25 February 2016 at 00:31

    I like how you used the sensory detail "SPLAC". it helped me hear the ball being smacked.

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